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Creativity: 15/15 I must say the creativity is there. It's a unique story to read as a fan of fiction. I immensely enjoyed it and the atmosphere that the imagination is based upon.
Originality:10/15 I feel like it's an original story in some aspects, but in others, I feel like it's not. Just because it's based on a janitor, I know many books I've read always have a famous person doing a typical job, and it's usually either a janitor or some form of little class, I want to say.
Storytelling: 10/15 I will say this: the storytelling needs a little editing. I feel like it's choppy when you read it; it doesn't read smoothly, and some parts of the story aren't clear. It's still a good story. I would recommend going back and rereading it or editing some of it.
Character:15 /15 I love the characters and the friendship that they bring to each other. The one thing that confused me about the story at some point was they put y / n. Now I'm old-fashioned, so y/n means yes or no so that part is trying to confuse me a little bit. I would say that if they are trying to put a name of some sort, it's either for the first or last name or both. That way, it's not confusing to some readers.
Story Flows:10 /15 Once again, it flows okay, but some parts are not as smooth as they should be. When it's transitioning, I feel like it needs a little bit of TLC and needs to be edited.
Cover Design:15 /15 I have no complaints about the cover. I think the body is beautiful and goes very well with the story.
Final Thoughts: 10/10 I find that the story is edited very well, and I just looked back, and some things were rewritten so that this story will blow readers out of the park. For fanfiction, it is a perfect story, but it is a little, like I said, choppy in certain parts of the story. I feel like it starts at a slow pace, and then, halfway through the slow pace, it jumps to a faster pace, making it a little choppiness because it's like you're in a slow. In the story, you're enjoying that slow pace, and it goes faster. And it's hard to transition to those. I also would change y/n if it's his or their name, whichever name. I would either put just their first name or their last name. Or if you want you can do both but for me it would be one or the other. That way, your older readers, like me, LOL, know what that abbreviation is. Because once again, for me, it means yes or no. Obviously, in this book, I don't think it means that.
Chapters I read:3
Total points: 85
Summary of the book:
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